Do you agree or disagree with this statement Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child s success in school

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Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
''Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's success in school.''

It is sometimes argued that classmates have a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Though classmates have had a many possitive effects, I completely disagree with this opinion thanks to parent’s role, which could include the first lessons and the motivation they offer.

To begin with, parents are the first educators in children’s life. For example, they not only provide moral support, advice but also create a comfortable learning environment. Moreover, they have abilities to satisfy children’s needs, even assist them in doing away with such distractors as social evils, violence,…

Last but not least, parents are those who are children’s encouraging-givers. A good example for this is that they always congratulate them on their achievements., nearly show their pride and expectation in them. Additionally, when they have troubles and problems to deal with, they will give us advisable saying. Therefore, it might create a great motivation and build up children’s confidence.

All in all, it is undeniable that parents make a significant contribution on a child’s success on school environment than classmates on account of obtaining a majority of essential skills, encourangements and significantly boast a child’s motivation in order to drive to success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
...ch distractors as social evils, violence,… Last but not least, parents are tho...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... Last but not least, parents are those who are children’s encouraging-givers. A good e...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...troubles and problems to deal with, they will give us advisable saying. Therefore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1126.0 937.175257732 120% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63 4.54256449028 124% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32661990615 2.54303337028 131% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8527818147 44.8134815571 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.111111111 76.5299724578 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 4.34317383033 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307419938013 0.216113520407 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121872693077 0.0766984524023 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145750919003 0.0603063233224 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185308047675 0.12726935374 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134498967001 0.0580467560999 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 8.37731958763 193% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 70.7449484536 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 7.45979381443 176% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 8.71597938144 180% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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