During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants Write a letter to this businessman In your letterr

Dear Mr. Jane,

I am writing to remind you about a career opportunity to your restaurant that I met you during our flight from Bangkok to Melbourne, TG 123.
I am very interested in your restaurant, particularly in Crown Prince Restaurant in Melbourne. Therefore, I would like to apply for the position of restaurant manager.
First of all, I was a restaurant manager in Kitchen Workshop at Crown Plaza for five years. My duties involved being in charge of the staff and customer service area, as well as collaborating with the kitchen area to ensure everything went smoothly.
Second of all, I worked as a financial manager for Thai Chilli Restaurant for a few months in 2015. I am confident I will organize and manage your staff and business to the best of my ability.
If you need further information, you can contact me on my number +06 5676543 or email me at jions@hotmail.com. If required, I can send you a copy of my resume.
I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Noppong Ampai

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om you. Yours sincerely, Noppong Ampai
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, therefore, well, mind you, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 844.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79545454545 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98305735754 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0495560793 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7272727273 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210786611625 0.216113520407 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765088550217 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599265056572 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110690243521 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721606794039 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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