A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Kumar Sampad and I am a resident from Danforth area. I am writing this letter to express my concern about the money your company is going to spend for our locality as part of corporate-social-responsibility.

It has been circulated in the local newspapers that your company wants to sponsor either for the local sports team or for funding two open-air concerts. As a concerned resident of this area, it is inevitable that funding for the local sports team will enable children to stay more healthy and active. As the sponsorship will remain valid for two years, it will encourage the residents of this area to send their children for enrollment in different other sports club and this spirit will be transferred to other children too.

Conversely, some people will contend for the sponsorship at the local event, for instance, the upcoming open-air concerts. Therefore, the entertainment cost will be reduced to the general public. In addition, this will help them to get an amusement with greater benefits of mental relaxation.

However, both options are having wide range of benefits for the local residents. But, personally, I believe, spending money for the sports team will be a wise option since its advantages outweigh the advantages of spending for local concerts.

I look forward to seeing your wise action on spending this huge money for a healthy purpose.

Yours faithfully,

Kumar Sampad

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...tertainment cost will be reduced to the general public. In addition, this will help them to ge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, however, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1217.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 237.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13502109705 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92362132708 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14218817194 2.54303337028 124% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561181434599 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 365.4 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5207588346 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.416666667 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 4.34317383033 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42946273797 0.216113520407 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158949587758 0.0766984524023 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119114975296 0.0603063233224 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224749780253 0.12726935374 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844882587704 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 8.37731958763 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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