A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the com

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Shyam, resident of Aparna Enclave Block-C and I really appreciate your idea of utilising certain amount towards the enrichment of our community. As I have been notified that you are seeking feedback on this decision between sponsoring sports activities and paying for concerts, I would want to take this opportunity to share my opinion on the advantages that sports could bring to the local community than participating in concerts.

The local cricket team "Panthers" is already known to be a bright as well as highly talented team. However, in the past, this team could not participate in the state level tournament due to financial troubles. If you could consider sponsoring them for the next 2 years, it would really bolster the confidence of public to take part in many more events. Also, such investments can help in nurturing the upbringing of the society.

On the other hand, I do agree that spending on the concerts would benefit the local community to certain extent. It gives the local community an avenue to attend the concerts as a family thereby giving them a source of enjoyment. In addition, such events usually provide an incentive to local shopkeepers to improve their business during the event. Furthermore, it also enables music bands to grow their network by showcasing their skills.

While spending on the concerts would promote economic growth of the community, I personally think it is going to be a short sighted achievement. I firmly believe that the company should consider sponsoring the sports team of the local community so that they get a chance to represent our community at National level tournaments in the future.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours sincerely
Shyam

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, really, so, well, while, in addition, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1474.0 937.175257732 157% => OK
No of words: 287.0 206.0 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13588850174 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91243348675 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602787456446 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 290.88556701 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2319219385 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.285714286 76.5299724578 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208599085097 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638724852956 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481679648121 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118343999305 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03624267324 0.0580467560999 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 8.37731958763 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 41.2886597938 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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