A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the comp

Dear sir/Madam,
The sponsorship which you have offered for two years to improvise local children's club or conducting an open-air concert is much appreciated. What I would suggest in these two proposals, the open-air concert would really make people understand diverse music culture, as well as people, can spend their leisure time very well.
Conducting a concert is a good way of attracting people but most of the people in our area are aged ranges from 60 - 70. In addition to that, many parents are working on night shifts. So this proposal would be obsolete. on the other hand, spending money on the local sports team would certainly get benefited because some of the members in the team are struggling to pay their equipment fees. As proof, last year national level competition, even the team had practiced well but they couldn't participate as scarce of money. If you would like to sponsor a soccer or football team will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for the opportunity to write to know about your sponsorship feedback. If you feel that any of my concerns are absurd, please let me know.
Yours faithfully
AK

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
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Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...en the team had practiced well but they couldnt participate as scarce of money. If you ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, well, in addition, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64341396688 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.705263157895 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8279602903 44.8134815571 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6363636364 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 4.34317383033 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227397869514 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679671187378 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632405861559 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170672557446 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00510049948102 0.0580467560999 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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