A sports club in your area is about to be closed and you oppose to that Write a letter to the manager and make suggestions why it is important that the club stays open

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A sports club in your area is about to be closed and you oppose to that. Write a letter to the manager and make suggestions why it is important that the club stays open.

Dear sir,

I am Simrandeepkaur , a resident of Model Town, Ludhiana. I am writing this letter to express my concern about closing of Raj sports club in this area.

I read this news in the local newspaper ‘The Tribune’ that a new shopping mall is going to be open in this place.I am an active member of this sports club and have been using all of its facilities for the last 6 months. As it is a well known fitness center which provides various useful amenities for city people. All city dwellers need this sports center because a healthy lifestyle is everyone’s priority nowadays and they require this club to do exercise, play games and to socialize..

I suggest you incorporate a facility of gym and swimming pool to the sports club which will attract more people.Inaddition,you can have special timings for children to play games and employ special instructors.

Hoping for a positive response from you.

Yours faithfully,
simran

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
Dear sir, I am Simrandeepkaur , a resident of Model Town, Ludhiana. I a...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing of Raj sports club in this area. I read this news in the local newspaper ‘...
^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ews in the local newspaper ‘The Tribune’ that a new shopping mall is going to be ...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... mall is going to be open in this place.I am an active member of this sports club...
^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... mall is going to be open in this place.I am an active member of this sports club...
^
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...do exercise, play games and to socialize.. I suggest you incorporate a facility...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I suggest you incorporate a facility of gym and swimming pool to the sports club...
^^
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Inaddition
...rts club which will attract more people.Inaddition,you can have special timings for childr...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , you
...hich will attract more people.Inaddition,you can have special timings for children t...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98125 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93579298392 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68125 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0399194891 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.625 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 4.34317383033 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227774782652 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898627671328 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860932385971 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127249884491 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063924009661 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
Dear sir, I am Simrandeepkaur , a resident of Model Town, Ludhiana. I a...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing of Raj sports club in this area. I read this news in the local newspaper ‘...
^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ews in the local newspaper ‘The Tribune’ that a new shopping mall is going to be ...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... mall is going to be open in this place.I am an active member of this sports club...
^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... mall is going to be open in this place.I am an active member of this sports club...
^
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...do exercise, play games and to socialize.. I suggest you incorporate a facility...
^^
Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I suggest you incorporate a facility of gym and swimming pool to the sports club...
^^
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Inaddition
...rts club which will attract more people.Inaddition,you can have special timings for childr...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , you
...hich will attract more people.Inaddition,you can have special timings for children t...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98125 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93579298392 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68125 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0399194891 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.625 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5 4.34317383033 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227774782652 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898627671328 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860932385971 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127249884491 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063924009661 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.