Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter:
– Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice
– Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate
– Express your enthusiasm for music
Dear Sir,
My name is Valli, and I have been playing the guitar for the past seven years. I am writing in regards to your advert about the orchestra on Times of India last week. Mainly, I am familiar with keyboard and guitar, where I am mastered with guitar chords.
During high school, I have my band called "Rock pond" where we partook in all international events and won the first prize.
Moreover, I went to Music school with a one-year Diploma course and got certified in it. Later, I have experience in assisting some of the independent music artists.
From my school days, I was wondering to become a guitarist and to excel in the music world. With the help of the internet, I learned the basic levels with rigour practises by following the videos. So, I am confident that this shows my level of passion for music.
Please be considerate of my application, I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Valli
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... for the past seven years. I am writing in regards to your advert about the orchestra on Time...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
.... Later, I have experience in assisting some of the independent music artists. From my s...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from you. Yours sincerely, Valli
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 796.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79518072289 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62155496657 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656626506024 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3996160575 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.3636363636 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0909090909 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 4.34317383033 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106097303574 0.216113520407 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502655968018 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611244103036 0.0603063233224 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0407811062881 0.12726935374 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289979094051 0.0580467560999 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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