Write a letter of application to the orchestra In the letter Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate Express your enthusiasm for music

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to the advert placed in The Times regarding the various available positions in the Urmston Festival Orchestra. My name is Peter Bedfellows, I am a pianist, and I’ve been a resident of Urmston for over four years.

I was most recently involved with the Barcelona symphony orchestra, with which I performed on a regular basis for over nine years. Although I lack formal training, I have been practising piano for almost two decades, and have recently mastered such pieces as Prokofiev’s third sonata. I would be happy to perform for a judge or panel whenever is convenient for you.

My wife and I left Barcelona to be closer to her family, who sadly refuse to leave Urmston, but I must continue with my music career; it has been my only passion since I was seven years old.

I welcome the opportunity to discuss this further in person.

Yours faithfully,
Peter Bedfellows

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 776.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70967594926 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68125 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.9943746836 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 4.34317383033 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102332907307 0.216113520407 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493250980119 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474873636112 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0349997590207 0.12726935374 28% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286588650235 0.0580467560999 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.