write a letter to organizer of annual festival who is going organize in your place Give feedback for last year mention what you can do and ask some questions about the festival

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write a letter to organizer of annual festival who is going organize in your place. Give feedback for last year, mention what you can do and ask some questions about the festival.

Dear Mr. Shah,

I am writing in regards to annual celebration that you are organizing this year. Since I was a part of organizing committee last year, I would like to offer some feedback that would aid your planning this year.

Last year, the carnival was proposed in December, and it was in open party plot at Sunpharma road. The celebration went excellent but people had to face inconvenience due to bitter weather and chilling cold. Had the event being placed in resort, people would not have this discomfort. This year again the carnival is thought to be in December; thus, it is better to have these things taken into consideration.

If you are looking for a resort, I can help you with the top resorts in the city at the reasonable rates. Having experience of planning several events with them in past, I can assure you of their service and arrangements. Therefore, let me know incase you need any help in this matter.

Finally, I am curious to know about the events that are going to take place. My family is super excited to know about the festival theme. I would appreciate if you could advertise certain events and theme, so that we could get our dress well-in-advance to enjoy the fun,

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

XYZ

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Mr. Shah, I am writing in regards to annual celebration that you are organiz...
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Line 13, column 162, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ce of planning several events with them in past, I can assure you of their service and ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1070.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77678571429 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61147740826 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620535714286 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0667078172 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3076923077 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2307692308 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76923076923 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234105988454 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763998282672 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061800436328 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114798534502 0.12726935374 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888261991754 0.0580467560999 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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