Write a letter to your friend from whom you borrowed something that accidentally broke Please say Remind him her what have you borrowed Explain what happened What you will do about it

Dear John,

Hope this letter finds you hale and healthy. I am writing to apologize for breaking down the lens of your camera. I regret for the inconvenience caused. Let me elaborate the situation. As you know, I celebrated my birthday last week and I borrowed the digital camera to take high definition pictures. When we were partying, one of my cousins who was holding the equipment, slipped it accidentally and we were hearing a loud noise of the lens being fell down. On noticing, the lens were not properly fixed to the camera and that caused the incident.
Since it is extremely expensive, I would like to replace you. Please share the model and make of the gadget so that I can find the same one before you leave for your vacation next week. Since it is has to be shipped from the United States, request you to share the details of the camera as soon as possible. Once again, I am very sorry for the loss occurred. Looking forward to hear from you.

Yours sincerely,
Zara

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Average: 7.3 (22 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...uipment, slipped it accidentally and we were hearing a loud noise of the lens being fell dow...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
... for the loss occurred. Looking forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Zara
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, as to, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 809.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 178.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54494382022 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44766583646 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651685393258 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1103292567 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.2307692308 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6923076923 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92307692308 4.34317383033 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184870358442 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629507706397 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546212236423 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141710364839 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321917668872 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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