Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear John,

I am writing to bring to your a significant error which is my computer restart it frequently since this morning so I cannot finish any task with it, and I used my co-worker's laptop to write this email to you.

The computer has been restarting since 9:00 AM, I guaranteed that I did not install any new software and the computer itself has regular temperature when I touched it. I tried to turn it off during my break time but it did not work.

As you know, working in the marketing department, my task is connecting with people no matter external or internal, without a computer I cannot send or receive any work task, especially emails. It is struggling because I could not do any work currently so please help me repaired this problem as soon as you can. Otherwise, I would like a new one instead, even just for a temporary period.

I am looking forward to you.

Kind regards,
Joe

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 748.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 164.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56097560976 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61109493809 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 127.690721649 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670731707317 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 228.6 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.7648068345 44.8134815571 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13822740958 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508453136758 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377241944129 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788273328637 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271208858575 0.0580467560999 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.