Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

am writing this letter to draw your attention towards technical glitch that occurred in computer system of HR department.

As you know my whole work depends on computer device. From last few days, the operating speed of system was slower than usual.I sensed window got outdated which is interrupting it's working efficiency. Moreover, floppy disk driver is out of range as it does not recognized data when i insert disk into it. I am unable to perform my job with diligence owing to distractions cause by it.

I tried on my behalf to troubleshoot glitches, however, i was failed. I have to prepare records of montly attendnce for every employee. Besides this, i have to maintain accounts of remuneration, incentives, duties and responsibilities for human resource.I wanted to send emails to the new job applicants for the interview but it also got delayed due to technical problem in computer.

I hope you understand this inconvenience and arrange a technician to sought out this obstacle as soon as possible. A new window can be installed to enhance it's manipulating speed.It would enable me to perform my tasks in an effective manner.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Am
am writing this letter to draw your attent...
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Line 1, column 2, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
am writing this letter to draw your attent...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in computer system of HR department. As you know my whole work depends on compu...
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Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...g speed of system was slower than usual.I sensed window got outdated which is int...
^
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'recognize'
Suggestion: recognize
...k driver is out of range as it does not recognized data when i insert disk into it. I am u...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nge as it does not recognized data when i insert disk into it. I am unable to per...
^
Line 5, column 57, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...half to troubleshoot glitches, however, i was failed. I have to prepare records o...
^
Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eshoot glitches, however, i was failed. I have to prepare records of montly atten...
^
Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...and responsibilities for human resource.I wanted to send emails to the new job ap...
^
Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...alled to enhance its manipulating speed.It would enable me to perform my tasks in ...
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Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective manner" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
....It would enable me to perform my tasks in an effective manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, moreover, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02631578947 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01115654059 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.705263157895 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2635898152 44.8134815571 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 4.34317383033 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128478254678 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464855926274 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528437020846 0.0603063233224 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805670528161 0.12726935374 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536409206188 0.0580467560999 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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