Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say.. Describe the problem. How it is affecting your work. What need to be done about it

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say.
. Describe the problem
. How it is affecting your work
. What need to be done about it

Dear manager,
I am writing this letter to draw your attention towards technical glitches that occurred in computer systems of Haryana Department.

There are manifold points behind this phenomenon. First and foremost, as you know my whole work depends on computer device. From last few days, the operating speed of system was slower than usual. I sensed window got outdated which is interrupting it is working efficiency. Apart from that, floppy disk driver is out of range as it does not recognised data when I insert disk into it. I am unable to perform my job with diligence owning to distractions cause by it.

On the other hand, I tried on my behalf to troubleshoot glitches however, I was failed. I have to prepare records of monthly attendance for every employee. Besides this, I have to maintain accounts of remuneration, incentives, duties and responsibilities for Human Resource’s. Therefore, I wanted to send e-mails to the new job applicants for the interview but it also got delayed due to technical concern in computer.

I hope you understand this inconvenience and arrange a technician to sought out this obstacle as soon as possible. A new window can be installed to enhance its manipulating speed. It would enable me to perform my tasks in an effective manner.
I solicit your cooperation.
Yours faithfully,
Mr. Mukesh [ Haryana Employee]

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'recognise'
Suggestion: recognise
...k driver is out of range as it does not recognised data when I insert disk into it. I am u...
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Line 8, column 220, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective manner" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... It would enable me to perform my tasks in an effective manner. I solicit your cooperation. Yours fa...
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Line 10, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cit your cooperation. Yours faithfully, Mr. Mukesh [ Haryana Employee]
^^^
Line 11, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space after the opening parenthesis
Suggestion: [
...ration. Yours faithfully, Mr. Mukesh [ Haryana Employee]
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, apart from, you know, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1153.0 937.175257732 123% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14732142857 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08821415492 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 127.690721649 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.696428571429 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0784460601 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0625 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 4.34317383033 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130012803939 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404443536199 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04788302257 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06892726589 0.12726935374 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596551124246 0.0580467560999 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 7.45979381443 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 7.59969072165 122% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 41.2886597938 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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