Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to you in relation to the advertisement that was circulated in the daily newspaper for seeking volunteers for the sports events happening in the city later next month. Allow me to elaborate on the details.
I was told by a friend of mine about the sports events happening and I have been incessantly talking about it. I was told by a sponsor that the event will be related to football of which I am a huge fan and I happen to have volunteered in many sports events across different cities around the world. I was a volunteer in the CWG Games 2010 and CWG Games 2014. I have always been amused by volunteering for sports events which I am interested in.
In the past events, I have been managing the crowd control committee and have a certificate of appreciation from the coordinating committee of both the events. I feel that the said experience from my past can cater to the needs of your event. As there is not much time left to train someone in the area of crowd management. Thus, I will be happy to work in the crowd control department for the event and I can assure you I will not let you down.
Further, I feel that the demand of ticket checkers in the events should be double than what has been advertised as it can be a daunting task to get everyone seated at the right time with fewer personals. I am not trying to domineer you in any manner. It is just a humble submission from my end as the situation can be appalling at the event if the personals are not increased. I hope that you will give me a chance and consider my humble submission made before you.
I am hoping for a favourable outcome of my application.
Yours sincerely,
Brad Jason
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 301, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ross different cities around the world. I was a volunteer in the CWG Games 2010 a...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the CWG Games 2010 and CWG Games 2014. I have always been amused by volunteering...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t can cater to the needs of your event. As there is not much time left to train so...
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Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of my application. Yours sincerely, Brad Jason
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, as to, i feel, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 26.3917525773 178% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 937.175257732 148% => OK
No of words: 316.0 206.0 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39873417722 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62314095133 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 127.690721649 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512658227848 0.622605031667 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 435.6 290.88556701 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8073905836 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.875 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 4.34317383033 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283562019041 0.216113520407 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873512500994 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742764977325 0.0603063233224 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150245517913 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633377797089 0.0580467560999 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.