You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
Give details of your study plans
Explain why you want to get a part time job
Suggest how your friend could help you find a job
I hope you’re doing fine these days. I have some super news for you, can you guess? I will come to your country next month to continue my education, and I am writing to ask whether you could help me to find a job.
As you know, I always have a dream to continue my education at oxford university. Fortunately, because I could finish my bachelor's degree with a high score, I could achieve my goal and get a found position at the master of electrical engineering there, which will start on 1st November.
Honestly speaking, university full founds undertake all master students’ education costs and give them rooms in the college dormitory. but shared rooms don’t suit my desires, and I prefer having my own accommodation. but, my family is in a tight budget, and I cannot ask them to support me financially. so, I need your help to find a part-time job to earn some money so that I can cover all my costs.
you have a clear understanding of my interests and skills. Hence, you can help me better than anyone. Also, you’re working in an international company and have social networks. I would be extremely grateful if you could ask them to find a position for me. Thank you so much for your help,
All the best,
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...some super news for you, can you guess? I will come to your country next month to...
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Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
...d I am writing to ask whether you could help me to find a job. As you know, I always have a d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ve them rooms in the college dormitory. but shared rooms don't suit my desires...
^^^
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...d I prefer having my own accommodation. but, my family is in a tight budget, and I ...
^^^
Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...not ask them to support me financially. so, I need your help to find a part-time j...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...ney so that I can cover all my costs. you have a clear understanding of my intere...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, honestly, if, so, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 32.9175257732 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61085972851 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80339292568 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6096436629 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7857142857 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7857142857 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310318159668 0.216113520407 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135517206766 0.0766984524023 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987420637901 0.0603063233224 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215403619395 0.12726935374 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150015073087 0.0580467560999 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.