You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events organizer.Write a letter to the training organizer•Expressing your interest in the role•Requesting mo

Dear Ms Sana,
I am writing this letter to express my interest to participate in the training programme conducted by the Evento Solutions Ltd. As intimated by the Head of the course, I would like to help in organizing the event.

I request you to provide some additional details about the event such as the venue ,date, time and if any registration process needs to be done before hand as I can plan my travel itinerary accordingly.

I have organized a number of professional and personal events and is well aware of the duties and responsibilities of an event organizer. I also have a degree in Event Management which is an added advantage over the other participants .Hence I believe,I would be the right candidate for this post.

Looking forward for a positive reply.

Thanking You

Yours Sincerely,

Alice

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Ms Sana, I am writing this letter to ex...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...etails about the event such as the venue ,date, time and if any registration proce...
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Line 4, column 145, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: beforehand
...y registration process needs to be done before hand as I can plan my travel itinerary accor...
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Line 6, column 139, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...responsibilities of an event organizer. I also have a degree in Event Management ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ed advantage over the other participants .Hence I believe,I would be the right can...
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Line 6, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
... advantage over the other participants .Hence I believe,I would be the right candidat...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... advantage over the other participants .Hence I believe,I would be the right candidat...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
... the other participants .Hence I believe,I would be the right candidate for this p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, if, look, so, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 32.9175257732 46% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 692.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 139.0 206.0 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97841726619 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43363162301 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96027211822 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 127.690721649 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.690647482014 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 290.88556701 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.610585762 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 4.34317383033 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286155429204 0.216113520407 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110764732591 0.0766984524023 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654638832606 0.0603063233224 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131839368513 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11685273885 0.0580467560999 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 7.59969072165 124% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 8.62886597938 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.