You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser.Write a letter to the Training Organiserexpressing your interest in the rolerequesting more

Essay topics:

You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events’ organiser.

Write a letter to the Training Organiser

expressing your interest in the role
requesting more information about it
explaining what experience you have
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am wiring this letter to express my interest in joining this years team as the events' organiser. I've always had a major interest in managing a wide range of events. Moreover, this could help build my resume, which may open a great set of career opportunities in the long-run.

I kindly ask you to provide me with further information about the duties and responsibilities that the position offers, as I was not able to view the flyer last week due to internet problems at my workplace. Therefore, I would like to request a copy to be mailed to my registered address.

Furthermore,I offer a wide range of managerial experience which could be of a great asset towards the given vacancy. For instance, problem solving, attention to detail , and consistency are some of my strong traits. These may help add value towards attaining the job offer.

I look forward to hear back from you!

Yours faithfully,
Matt Jones
Supervisor

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'events'' or 'event's'?
Suggestion: events'; event's
...erest in joining this years team as the events organiser. Ive always had a major inter...
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Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...his years team as the events organiser. Ive always had a major interest in managing...
^^^
Line 7, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...to my registered address. Furthermore,I offer a wide range of managerial experi...
^^
Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ce, problem solving, attention to detail , and consistency are some of my strong t...
^^
Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...aining the job offer. I look forward to hear back from you! Yours faithfully, Ma...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 798.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 163.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89570552147 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84465433728 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.717791411043 0.622605031667 115% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7916643588 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 4.34317383033 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0977052375992 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378475786184 0.0766984524023 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381607293164 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0495777961386 0.12726935374 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230985510726 0.0580467560999 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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