You cannot pick your friend up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her. In your letter, you should explain the reasons. You should provide him/her with alternative ways to go to the hotel. You should inform him/her of your plan.
Dear Maggie,
It has been a long time since we did not see each other, and I hope that you are doing well in this period. I am writing this letter to apologize that I cannot pick you up at the airport.
First of all, one of my friends has unfortunately developed a severe chronic condition and lived in a hospital recently. Therefore, I have to spend that day taking after him. In addition, I am also busy with my job, as my leader has allocated an important assignment to me, which would take a long time to complete.
However, you do not need to be obsessive about how to arrive the hotel. Once you leave the airport, you have a series of options to reach the hotel. Firstly, you can call a cab that would merely cost you approximately twenty dollars; or, you prefer to a cheaper transport mode, you can purchase the bus ticket that charges you 10 dollars.
I will visit you at the hotel in two days after you settle in it. I intend to take you to visit the famous skyscraper, one of the tallest buildings in Melbourne, the rooftop of which allows you to enjoy the magnificent panorama of the whole city.
I hope that you will accept my apologizes. I look forward to hearing from you.
Best regards,
David Villa.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Better to use less pronouns as possible. The reason is that IELTS examiners don't like pronouns from the feedback of testbig users.
for example:
Firstly, you can call a cab that would merely cost you approximately twenty dollars; or, you prefer to a cheaper transport mode, you can purchase the bus ticket that charges you 10 dollars.
revised:
Firstly, Cabs are available everywhere to merely cost you approximately twenty dollars; or, a cheaper transport mode by purchasing the bus ticket that charges you 10 dollars.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 227 250
No. of Characters: 953 1200
No. of Different Words: 137 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.198 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 57 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.032 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.712 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.248 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...agnificent panorama of the whole city. I hope that you will accept my apologizes...
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Line 10, column 43, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ope that you will accept my apologizes. I look forward to hearing from you. Be...
^
Line 14, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m you. Best regards, David Villa.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 32.9175257732 128% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1010.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 227.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44933920705 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47443016355 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616740088106 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 318.6 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1658169914 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6923076923 76.5299724578 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4615384615 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 4.34317383033 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314485158097 0.216113520407 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116550773421 0.0766984524023 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851733395929 0.0603063233224 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17093961049 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712930537371 0.0580467560999 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.