You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS band
score of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master’s Courses ( you need 6.5)
Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter
• Introduce yourself.
• Enquire about any alternative ways of gaining entrance
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regard to a letter I have received from your university indicates that my IELTS score is not appropriate for getting the admission for master degree.
My name is Rahi Honarvar and I got my bachelor degree of science in computer engineering from one of the prestigious universities of Iran which is renowned almost all over the world. It has been 2 months ago that I have applied for a course in Computer technology and science in your university. While I was surfing the university website I recognized that the necessary documents were a coloured copy of my passport, bachelor degree and IELTS document and it was not mentioned anything relevant to the IELTS score.
I would like to know whether there is any alternative that could be used instead of the IELTS document, since I have made plans for starting my study in the next academic year that would be in the next 3 months. Furthermore, this time is not long enough for me to be prepared for this exam.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, look, so, while, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 902.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74736842105 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6844375549 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.055100444 44.8134815571 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 16.8248392259 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245668937128 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102243563063 0.0766984524023 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912645894538 0.0603063233224 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156206765337 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117946051046 0.0580467560999 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.