You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Write a letter to the parents In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would

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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter,

explain why you would like the job
give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Madam,

I have moved to Australia last week. Yesterday, I came across your advert, in a local magazine, to hire someone for taking care of your offspring. I am writing to apply for the job and hope you would consider my application.

Due to my dance workshop, I have to stay in Australia for next six months. The reason for my interest in this job is that I am searching for an accommodation as well as a part-time job, as I would have a plethora of spare time. Since you are offering both, it would be a quite beneficial for me.

In addition, because I have two younger siblings, twins in fact, I have an adequate experience of not only looking after infants, but also encourage them to invest their time in productive activities such as art and craft, dance, yoga.

Also, I have enrolled in yoga and fitness training in a nearby club myself. So, in my leisure time I would attend my yoga classes and exercise in the gym. I have attached all the documents that are mentioned in the advertisement. Please contact me on my mobile phone if you need any further details.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Jaskaran Kaur.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ason for my interest in this job is that I am searching for an accommodation as w...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...in this job is that I am searching for an accommodation as well as a part-time job, as I would ...
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Line 15, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jaskaran Kaur.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, in addition, in fact, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.625 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66911369174 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649038461538 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8429581302 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290181635936 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948668818987 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643476717474 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13609965943 0.12726935374 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766307846574 0.0580467560999 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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