You recently heard about some new jobs at a local department store. You would like to work there.
Write a letter to store manager of the department store. In your letter
- Explain how you heard about the job
- Describe the kind of job you would like to have
- Give details of your experience and qualifications
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my interest in some of the jobs advertised on “Job-Bank” website on February 5th, 2022.
I am a registered member of Job-Bank and hence noticed advertisements for various positions in the food services department for Oakville location by Walmart.
Among several positions advertised under retail bakery section for “Meat Cutters”, “Bakers” and ‘Cake decorators”, I am keen on cake decorating as I have knowledge about baking ingredients, techniques and about product range.
I have a diploma in Baking and Pastry Arts from Conestoga. I enjoy the process of creative creation, worked as a baker for 6 years at Sobeys. I have been recognised by the store manager for keeping area clean, well-stocked and organised. My experience is not limited to cake decorating, I am a team player and possess excellent customer service skill. In addition, I am accustomed to work independently in a fast-paced environment.
I look forward to hearing from you for an in-person interview.
Yours sincerely,
Sid Mohan
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in s...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... I am writing to express my interest in some of the jobs advertised on “Job-Bank” website o...
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Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
... Cutters”, “Bakers” and ‘Cake decorators”, I am keen on cake decorating as I have...
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Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...orked as a baker for 6 years at Sobeys. I have been recognised by the store manag...
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Line 7, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in-person interview. Yours sincerely, Sid Mohan
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, look, so, well, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 32.9175257732 43% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 898.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31360946746 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28705547988 2.54303337028 129% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.692307692308 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9597226117 44.8134815571 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163068342571 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546219100573 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365497644023 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850413870457 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276826358729 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.