You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch.-Say what the part

Dear Sir John
I feel the need to bring to your attention some contributions from the participants who joined the company’s all-day meeting at your hotel last week. Please let me elaborate on this
As you know, most people from my company were strongly impressed with the splendid-decorated hotel, modern conference hall and other facilities. Moreover, they also interested in your consideration and devotion of your staffs such as free-wireless, parking spaces as well as the preparation of papers and pens on the desks.
Unfortunately, many participants were some experiences that would like to share with you. You see, the meeting time was extended that made members feel hungry and exhausted. They were waiting for foods for a long time. In addition, some people were also complaining about the number of staffs, who served the customers at each table, were less than demand.
In my point of view, the foods should be prepared at a specific time and increase the number of staffs as per the participants. This is quite essential to improve to build an attractive and professional hotel in the future.
Your timely attention to this matter is needed.
Sincerely.
Chau Minh Ky

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'knew'?
Suggestion: knew
...k. Please let me elaborate this As you known, almost people from my company was stro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, well, while, i feel, in addition, such as, you know, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 950.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21978021978 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9559826784 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675824175824 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1974169126 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 76.5299724578 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 4.34317383033 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276954011892 0.216113520407 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881059185932 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534587940902 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139510004652 0.12726935374 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797821172643 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 8.37731958763 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 8.71597938144 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 8.62886597938 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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