Dear Haruka.
Hello Haruka. I am writing a reply to your letter that asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. I think trying to get a job is better for you. I would like to write reasons why.
At first, I will mention about disadvantage of going to college. I think you would not enjoy it, because in a college, especially Japanese college, you could only meet people who are around same as you! You must have already met such a people in your junior high school and high school. In addition to it, many students tend to just have fun with friends beside study. The reason why this happen, it is usually very difficult to enter Japanese colleges but to graduate it is not so difficult. For that reason, many students tend to just have enjoy, like having parties, going out, going travel. However, college costs a huge of money on you. The fee of it is not cheap of course. I think it is waste of money to go to college.
Next, I would tell you why getting a job is good for you. The most valuable point is experience. Not like college, you can see many people from different age of you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good for you. Not only from people, you can also get important experience from working. You could know how different to earn money and also you can know many social system as well.
Lastly, I would like to suggest the type of job that would be suitable for you. I think you good at talking with people, so the reception of company, school or hotel would be good. You can meet not only colleague but also many people of customers. If you would get a job of hotel, you can use your English skill as well.
In conclusion, I should try to get a job for these reason. Good luck for you.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... trying to get a job is better for you. I would like to write reasons why. At ...
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Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...reason, many students tend to just have enjoy, like having parties, going out, going ...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good ...
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Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
... you. By talking with them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good for you. N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, so, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 4.92783505155 386% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 32.9175257732 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 26.3917525773 193% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1448.0 937.175257732 155% => OK
No of words: 341.0 206.0 166% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24633431085 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17556967953 2.54303337028 86% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 127.690721649 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472140762463 0.622605031667 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 290.88556701 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.13402061856 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 12.6804123711 181% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4719012996 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.9565217391 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8260869565 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13043478261 4.34317383033 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 7.41237113402 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393429396655 0.216113520407 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122213776567 0.0766984524023 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106524254661 0.0603063233224 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261944000811 0.12726935374 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803631305059 0.0580467560999 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 8.37731958763 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.41 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.