You visited a theatre last week with your friend. Your friend had a small accident. Write a letter to the manager of the theatre.Explain the accidentHow staff helpedHow can a manager make sure nothing of this sort happens again (something like this)

Essay topics:

You visited a theatre last week with your friend. Your friend had a small accident. Write a letter to the manager of the theatre.

Explain the accident
How staff helped
How can a manager make sure nothing of this sort happens again (something like this)

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to inform you about the small accident that took place with my friend on 28th July at around 7 p.m. in your parking lobby.

I and my friend Ajit had decided to see an evening show at Cinemax. Ajit dropped me at the ticket counter and went to park his car. Since there was no light in the parking, he slipped off from the stairs. He was not able to walk and shouted for help from the place where he fell.

After hearing my friend for help, your staff named Manish immediately took the torch and went to see Ajit. Manish not only helped my friend by making him feel good but also helped by providing first aid kit; however, this incidence was due to lack of proper management from your side.

The theatre should be responsible to check if all the lights are working in the parking area and whether individuals are able to park their vehicles with ease. As this incidence can be risky for people visiting the theatre, I request you to assign some concerned person who ought to be responsible for working of lights in the parking lobby. The theatre should also keep some alternative device to provide lights during unavailability of electricity which will ensure that such incidence is not repeated.

Hope my suggestion will be given due consideration. I can also be reached on my cell 987654321

Your's faithfully
John Patel.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... for help from the place where he fell. After hearing my friend for help, your s...
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...ck of proper management from your side. The theatre should be responsible to che...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1132.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 242.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67768595041 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4355920148 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615702479339 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2086754525 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3333333333 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 4.34317383033 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186039598759 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611363711896 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578359131833 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959991987154 0.12726935374 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668427562737 0.0580467560999 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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