You were in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket.Write a letter to the manager at the supermarket. In your letter:-say who you are-give details about the accident-suggest how the supermarket could prevent simil

Essay topics:

You were in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

Write a letter to the manager at the supermarket. In your letter:

-say who you are

-give details about the accident

-suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope this e-mail finds you well.

I would like to take this opportunity to explain about the incident I had yesterday at your supermarket located on the 10th Street Westwood.

My name is Liliya Kasanshina and I have been loyal to your store since 2010. I have always the best shopping experience with you but the situation which makes me write this letter to you cannot be unattended.

 

On October 16, 2019 I went as usual to buy some groceries and I found that  some maintenance work was held on the shop floor. Few of the employees were trying to fix the new poster on the wall using the screwdriver. At some point I was exactly next to the fixing site and got hurt because the poster fell down right to my feet. It is important to mention that the poster was inside a wooden frame and was completely heavy so the weight of it made me feel a severe pain which led to having bruises. However the staff was very helpful and did all their best in order to apologise and to reduce the risk of being hospitalized.

In fact I would like to raise this concern due to my strong  recommendation to you abiut conducting all the merchandising and maintenance procedures out of trading hours which will minimise the all the possible issues which might happen. It could be done, for example, at night or early in the  morning before the opening of the supermarket. Prevention of the emergencies is the best practice.

I hope all the required actions will be taken by  the management of the supermarket as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,

Liliya Khasanshina 

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 27, column 504, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...evere pain which led to having bruises. However the staff was very helpful and did all ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, well, for example, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 26.3917525773 155% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 937.175257732 149% => OK
No of words: 282.0 206.0 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95035460993 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80446911729 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613475177305 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 290.88556701 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.7258299404 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7142857143 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176718519121 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568892887829 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520581315185 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869450070457 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505189625313 0.0580467560999 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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