you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo

Dear Tom,

I want to tell you that i love to work in the company's head office for six months,will appreciate it if i could be moved to our company's head office in Italy.

As you know being my manager, i have been working in Nigeria office for the past eight (8) years. Presently i have an opportunity to study a course on self development that will help me to be more efficient in my job likewise will love to move my family to Italy while studying.

I will call or send you a mail after getting your approval on how i should process the form and all necessary documents for my transfer or if there is any new vacancy that i need to apply for.

This is to let you know that i can continue my job with my computer also Mrs Joy has offered to help me with my any other job i have on ground.

Thank you for your support and guidance as i wait to hear from you.

Yours faithfully
Bisoye

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
Dear Tom, I want to tell you that i love to work in the companys head offic...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , will
... the companys head office for six months,will appreciate it if i could be moved to ou...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ce for six months,will appreciate it if i could be moved to our companys head off...
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Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...mail after getting your approval on how i should process the form and all necessa...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...fer or if there is any new vacancy that i need to apply for. This is to let yo...
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Line 9, column 30, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ly for. This is to let you know that i can continue my job with my computer al...
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Line 11, column 44, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nk you for your support and guidance as i wait to hear from you. Yours faithfu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, likewise, so, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 726.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 175.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.14857142857 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29284601688 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617142857143 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.174594659 44.8134815571 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.714285714 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302310632185 0.216113520407 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154024916753 0.0766984524023 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10598777603 0.0603063233224 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171019712657 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110504270442 0.0580467560999 190% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.09 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 41.2886597938 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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