You work in an office where you sit and do your work the whole day. You are worried about the effect of this on your health.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
• Explain how sitting always is affecting your health
• Suggest changes the company can make to help you stay healthy
• Explain how these changes can help the company in future
Dear Madam,
I am writing this letter with regards to the 12 hours of sitting job that I do here as a pedicurist and I am really worried about the swells on my feet.
As you know since Jenny has been on leave since 2 months, I am putting more hours to fill in for her clients appointments. I spend most of the 12 hours cleaning, shaping and polishing tow nails and this is giving me pain in my feet.
I am managing this but suggest you to kindly get other staff to also do Jenny’s work also not just me. I can do hair cut and facials to give relaxation to my feet if other staff cover pedicures.
I think if all girls work on different jobs, it can be good for Casa salon as all staff can know every type of job.
I am really hoping that you consider health situation and make some changes to our working schedules. Hoping to hear from you soon.
Regards,
Champi
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- You work in an office where you sit and do your work the whole day You are worried about the effect of this on your health Write a letter to your manager In your letter Explain how sitting always is affecting your health Suggest changes the company can ma 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Madam, I am writing this letter with regards to...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... also do Jenny’s work also not just me. I can do hair cut and facials to give rel...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... feet if other staff cover pedicures. I think if all girls work on different jo...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...all staff can know every type of job. I am really hoping that you consider heal...
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Line 8, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oping to hear from you soon. Regards, Champi
^^^
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hear from you soon. Regards, Champi
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, well, i think, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 708.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.18934911243 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24641757762 2.54303337028 88% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644970414201 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 207.9 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3831622341 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 4.34317383033 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190622277932 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737823459671 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543665091201 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103323538778 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471962099401 0.0580467560999 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 84.0 70.7449484536 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.