You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town Write a letter to the shop andask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods f

Dear Manager,

I am Samuel living in Town X and knowing that your shop has a very complete collection on electronic goods. I would like to check whether your shop has the good that I found for a month and none of any place in my town has the device.

I would like to buy the latest tablet computer, ipad Pro 11 manufactured by Apple with storage of 1TB. I have checked the online shop of Apple and it was out of stock and no estimated available date. I need to have this ipad before the end of this month to be the gift for my wife’s birthday.

If your shop have the stock, I can come and buy the ipad on this weekend. While if your shop out of stock, could you do me a favour to order a stock from other networked shop? Also I want to know the price and the duration that your shop could hold the item. Please reply me via phone at 85297878546 if possible.

Thank you for your support in advance.

Yours faithfully,
Mr Samuel TSE

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...any place in my town has the device. I would like to buy the latest tablet com...
^
Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ufactured by Apple with storage of 1TB. I have checked the online shop of Apple a...
^
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... stock and no estimated available date. I need to have this ipad before the end o...
^
Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rder a stock from other networked shop? Also I want to know the price and the durati...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 769.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.20218579235 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20540382376 2.54303337028 87% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584699453552 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 229.5 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3407643851 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9090909091 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.72727272727 4.34317383033 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199067351146 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738103780481 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044002089136 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115991695548 0.12726935374 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404517777149 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 8.37731958763 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.