Your sister has been in the hospital for a week During this time you have noticed the meals are providing for her are very poor quality Write an email to the hospital manager and include the following things Tell him her what you have seen in the past Com

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Your sister has been in the hospital for a week. During this time, you have noticed the meals are providing for her are very poor quality. Write an email to the hospital manager and include the following thingsÑ

-Tell him/her what you have seen in the past.
-Complain about the food quality.
-Offer a suggestion on how things could improve.

Dear hospital manager,

I am writing you to express concern I have about the food quality at your hospital. My sister has been in the hospital for a week, and the meals the nurses are feeding her are very unhealthy.

So far, the meals have mainly consisted in carbs and sugar. This has had a negative effect on my sister's health. For lunch today, they gave her mashed potatoes and strawberry jelly. I am concerned about this because there is almost no nutritional value in these foods. How are the patients supposed to get better when they are not being given a healthy diet?

I would like to suggest a change in the meal plans. Perhaps the patients could be given fish or chicken for for supper everyday in order to get some protein.For lunches, they could be given a healthy salad with a dairy product such as yogurt or cheese. I believe a balanced diet like this would help the patients improve much faster.

I hope you accept my advice for the sake of all the patient's health.

Regards,
Peter

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...ccept my advice for the sake of all the patients health. Regards, Peter
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 833.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60220994475 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28032943297 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646408839779 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4146672604 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7272727273 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 4.34317383033 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26677954774 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868294716735 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901200711018 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156727790416 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113890264502 0.0580467560999 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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