Many people spend a lot of time using communication technology. What are the reasons for this? What is the impact with their families and other people?
In today’s world, technology has dramatic changed in human lives. People have changed to spend a lot of time on playing a smart phone or a computer. Moreover, since many social applications have been invented such as Facebook or Instragram, many people have become spend more time on communication technologies and ignore to spend time on their lovers. The causes and effects of the excessive use of communication technologies will be discussed carefully.
To begin with, there are many reasons behind this phenomenon. First and foremost, it is unavoidable the use of technological devices in a work place these days. Many companies have changed the way of communication in traditional ways to technological measures such as sending texts via emails or a mobile phone. Communicating through e-mail can attach important files to a receiver effectively and quickly, as a result many organizations have used this method instead. Moreover, with the high technology of programs and new applications, many social networks such as Facebook, twitters and Whatapp have been invented to a society. Social networks gravitate towards many people all over the world to share their information and track other people’s lives. The curiosity of other people’s lives increases the number of social network users significantly. All of these points support the idea that why people spend more time on these technologies rather than pay attention on their friends and family.
There are many negative effects of this situation. Using communication technologies can definitely be affected the relationship of family. Playing social networks excessively distract a lot of time that people should spend with their family members. Lacking some precious time with family can be caused to misunderstand. If family members still do not pay more attention to others and are addicted to social networks, the bond in family members will become worse then.
In conclusion, even though modern workers cannot avoid from using technologies in their professional work, people still need to manage their time and control yourself not overuse these programs. Having some valuable time with lovers is very essential because it can improve the bond of family members to be stronger, eventually.
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technology has dramatic changed in human lives.
technology has dramatically changed human's lives.
Sentence: Moreover, since many social applications have been invented such as Facebook or Instragram, many people have become spend more time on communication technologies and ignore to spend time on their lovers.
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Sentence: First and foremost, it is unavoidable the use of technological devices in a work place these days.
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Using communication technologies can definitely be affected the relationship of family
Using communication technologies can definitely affect the relationship of family
Playing social networks excessively distract a lot of time
Playing social networks excessively distracts a lot of time
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