6.Some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
As the internet brings people better vision stimulation, many people prefer to stay at home and travel by watching landscapes or videos on internet or TV. Whereas the others believe that it is beneficial to travel internationally. I believe that it is better to travel around the world in person.
To begin with, it is significant to travel to other countries in person, this is because it creates important and precious memories. There are always things happen during journey, which can be treasure and beautiful. For example, traveling to another country might meet someone who shares the same conception and idea,which might developed to best friend, business partner or even lover. Therefore the actual experiences are important and memorable in people’s live.
On the other hand, people watch traveling program on internet; saves time and money, also reduce the risks. This means that International travelling costs huge amount of money and waste a lot of time. For instance, many people only aim to study local culture and local landscapes through travelling abroad, can be provided by informative Internet, such as: traveling program, local films, and etc... Moreover, there are also risks due to unfamiliar environment, foreign languages and the local conventions. If the visitor have met problem in a foreign country, it usually hard to seek help from the around.
In conclusion, even though it is money consuming, time wasting and life risking to travel abroad, the precious memories and experiences that the travel gives to people are irreparable by the internet and TV.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24803149606 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77659556273 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602362204724 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6413857664 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.538461538 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221912415863 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774138333209 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623749013547 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14530348671 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498517184505 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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