The adverse effect of sugar on health is well known to the public now. Some believe that the government should control the amount of sugar people consume. Others think that it is the responsibility of an individual to monitor their sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today's modern society, there is no doubt that sugar consumption creates a negative impact on people’s overall health. Some stated that the response to preventing sugar overuse belongs to the government, meanwhile, others believed that individuals have to do it on their own. In this essay, the writer will analyze both points of view as well as providing his thought on this issue.
On the one hand, the government is a group of people whom all citizens of a country give the responsibility to manage their basic rights and needs. As a result, the government should take care of everybody's health which not excluded sugar intake. For example, the nation’s ministries which in charge of people’s healthcare as well as services should limit the amount of sugar or sugary products an individual can purchase and consume annually. Moreover, the government should also force food and beverage companies to provide exact sugar aggregate on nutrition facts so that they can manage sugar usage more accurately.
On the other hand, it goes without saying that every person, physically and mentally, is a unique existence. Thus, it is the responsibility of an individual to monitor their well-being as well as sugar absorption. The government healthcare system can only provide information like the food pyramid or the RDI (reference daily intake), citizen have to based on these things in order to manage sugar themselves. If people cannot do it on their own, even the best healthcare system in developed countries could not handle the result, hence, the impact on the society and economy would be extremely giant.
In conclusion, country citizens and the government should cooperate in monitoring sugar consumption to ensure human robustness as well as global wealth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20979020979 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80355921135 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3042697213 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.166666667 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8333333333 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4145897902 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150092840963 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936069604758 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244088950824 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514658971364 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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