Advertisement : Writing Task 2: An increasing number of advertisements on TV aim at children. What are the effects of television advertising? Should television advertising be controlled?
Some people believe that the number of television advertisings directing at the young generation is rising increasingly. In my opinion, promotions on TV affect negatively lifestyles of children that it should be controlled.
It is undeniable that television advertisings have negative impacts on the eating habits and personalities of children. Firstly, in the modern world, due to the mass commercial of junk-foods or fast foods as delicious and spectacular meals, children tend to consume and enjoy these kinds of food, which have highly saturated fat, instead of traditional and nutritious foo...
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in these modern days, commercials become a useful marketing tool for numerous com...
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Line 8, column 107, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...become extremely serious, as I discussed , the television advertisings should be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71428571429 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16890897988 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586080586081 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.6488152731 49.4020404114 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.818181818 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276427162798 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124985709671 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102056539389 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209211214226 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860263036935 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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