Advertising discourages us from being different and individuals eventually look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The 21st century has seen a large number of advertisement. Some people think that advertising promote the public to be the same and lack of diversity. Although I believe that advertising will influence the fashion, I do not agree that it will make individuals look the same.
On the one hand, advertising is a key part of modern business, which be widely used by kinds of companies. We can watch so many advertisements that people would be attracted by some special ad. For example, sports giant companies like Nike will advertise their new products on TV, NBA games or cooperate with famous basketball players like Kobe Bryant and Lebron James. In this way, many students are likely to buy new signature shoes so in schools there are many students wearing same shoes.
On the other hand , although people may look similar while they wear the same clothes and shoes which are influenced by advertisements,
most people choose their favorite products mainly out of personal preferences and affordability. Some luxurious perfumes and handbags, for instance can only attract some upper-class people rather than consumers with average incomes, no matter how heavily their makers are willing to spend on commercials.
In conclusion, despite the fact that advertisements promote sales among different groups of people, it is difficult that everyone will become fan of same type of product. The more likely situation, by contrast, is that competitions will become increasingly heated as consumers with more and more diversity. And people will buy different products depend on their own need.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
The 21st century has seen a large number of advertisement. Some people think that a...
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Line 5, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...wearing same shoes. On the other hand , although people may look similar while ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23046875 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84562720861 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62890625 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2845479999 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.583333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156285121113 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646181000219 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671874478256 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929965064604 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795376523763 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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