Can poverty be the hindrance to the education? If yes provide some solutions to the keys.
Today in the competetive world, money plays very important role in the education and it can be hindrance for poor families. But in the meantime whether it is blessing or curse has sparked a heated debate. Some people believe that children brought up by poor parents study better in school colleague or in the university. However, others argue that rich parents brought their children better and they can study easier and better than children from poor families. This essay wil discuss both aspects before making any definitive conclusion.
On one hand side, some people believe that some children from the less wealthy families might be in the good position of knowledge. Children from poor parents learn how to deal with difficult situations in education systems without corruption, and learn to solve problems with their knowledge and abilities. As a result, poor children are becoming more hard work and more well learn. For instance, in the school poorer children may have to wait until the birthday or holiday for a favourite book or something else that they have asked for, and this encourage them to learn patience. Those children also learn the importance of money which will help them in later life.
On the other hand, some people argue that money is very important for a better study of children in the future. Wealthy parents have opportunity to send their children to better schools and university. As a result, graduation from the better schools and universities will secure their future. Poorer children have less chances of this kind of future, because they are not sent in better schools and universities, where study children of rich families.
To sum up, I believe that children from the poorer families can better study than richer parents' children. Poorer children are more confident and succesful in their life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 478, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (wil) must be used with a third-person verb: 'discusses'.
Suggestion: discusses
...dren from poor families. This essay wil discuss both aspects before making any definiti...
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Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...cure their future. Poorer children have less chances of this kind of future, because...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.274924471299 0.247107548796 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.123867069486 0.15552993741 80% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0996978851964 0.0946569551029 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0392749244713 0.0437536398559 90% => OK
Prepositions: 0.14501510574 0.122223957237 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0181268882175 0.0403219363162 45% => More participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.46456219492 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0211480362538 0.0326786765898 65% => OK
Particles: 0.00604229607251 0.00163938923432 369% => Too many particles.
Determiners: 0.0845921450151 0.0861751148067 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0211480362538 0.0214082191602 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00906344410876 0.0119246538136 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1833.0 1933.38276553 95% => OK
No of words: 303.0 316.052104208 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.02960526316 6.10592293882 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20519365927 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.369636963696 0.37474360046 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283828382838 0.284197041944 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184818481848 0.203843217982 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108910891089 0.137313986986 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46456219492 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491749174917 0.560935902166 88% => OK
Word variations: 48.796284209 60.7401812628 80% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0911823647 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9375 20.7725350517 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5765364789 49.5273876611 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9373040752 93.4120437189 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.197492163 15.2821509519 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.601880877743 0.594174754866 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01102204409 40% => OK
Readability: 47.3203382838 49.1922392462 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.16417910448 1.69127372897 128% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.238788098755 0.332604825255 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.1217854566 0.102734651613 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0760838233577 0.0668474354756 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.511072236447 0.534917948617 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133064713341 0.148666948902 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102995472657 0.13441755203 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821191368919 0.0742828286743 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.379600472605 0.324241079732 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0117692016656 0.0640056729886 18% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172289237238 0.22793763319 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407224906653 0.0582452615562 70% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41883767535 29% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.88977955912 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.60220440882 154% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 10.493987976 143% => OK
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Rates: 48.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: ? Out of 9
The essay is not exactly right on the topic.