Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries What are the causes of this What solutions can be offered

Do you wonder how many calories are consumed one day ? It has the association with the key consideration which is termed “ obesity “. Albeit there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems.

Several related problems can be anticipated : physical health and mental health. First , obesity is a chronic disease that transpires due to an overboost in body fat, promoting and disrupting fat tissue function. It is irrefutable that a profusion of out-weighted people are absorbed heart diseases. Obviously , wounded cardiovascular is stemming from hypertension. According to Harold Bays, MD,Medical Director of the Louisville Metabolic and Atherosclerosis Research Center, and Medical Director of Your Body Goal contended that excessive increase in fat in the atrial, ventricular and atrial enlargement of the body, they directly contribute to cardiovascular disease. Second , this issue still bring about unconducive elements , one of them is pessimism about exteriority . In these days , a plethora of people is pursuing novel aesthetic trends ; hence they would have stigmatized eyes on outweighted individuals. So terrible are judgements that they trigger the guilt in their hearts even willing to commit suicide. Profoundly , obesity is a handicapped obstruction to apply for occupation. Centizents are expected to maintain balanced diet .

There are several actions that could be taken to tackle the problems. Third , the government is expected to foster them to engage in fit class . That training courses would enable people to undergo editorial stages in determined interval . If they do not loose weight and overcome complications , they will be paid a sum of money . For instance , such as “ Dance your fat off “ from Thailand , participants of programme lost about 45kg. In my opinion, This is impressive number with each viewers . Not only do officials but the enterprise also should introduce healthy production to clients or curb the promotive policy including ” buy one get one “ . In addition , nutritious goods such as fresh vegetables , vegetarian food should display in the supermarket or stores . In my view of point , second solution outshine first solution in marketing and spreading .

To recapitulate , obesity is contributed to both physical and mental healths which are vulnerable . Thus, we ,people have to prevent this issue from ameliorate daily life qualities and ourselves .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, still, third, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, in my opinion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 378.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57407407407 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11637876284 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65873015873 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.2799800009 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7916666667 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.01903807615 657% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118942781982 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293936853993 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331958152546 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0753824218487 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026096439709 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 78.4519038076 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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