One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of individuals believing that in modern era youngsters are facing pressure in academic social and commercial areas there are multiple factors that attribute to this problem this essay will further elaborate my views in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with there deluges of causes that are creating burden on children in academic social and commercial aspects. The most preponderant one is that children have to compete with other students to get admission. This is to say that in this highly competitive era, in order to obtain admission to eminent colleges, they must work hard, which is extremely stressful. In addition, parents tend to force their children to choose academic subjects to show off to society. In other words, when they start university, they usually are pressurized by their parents. For example, a survey in India found that 20% of children took their own life because they were not mentally stable due to the study pressure and were afraid of failure and did not want to face society.
To tackle this problem, the give should launch campaign programs in the media and in schools to educate students and parents. In these programs, children should be taught to be cooperative rather than competitive. Moreover, parents should let their wards decide to make their career choices rather than forcing them. As a result, children can perform well if they study subjects that they are interested in children can progress in their future .For instance, pressure on children has decreased by 10 % after this similar initiative started in Japan.
In conclusion, nowadays, competition between students has increased and forcing children to take academic subjects creates pressure on children. However, it can be addressed through educating children and parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25418060201 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66170162782 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581939799331 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0498554497 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.846153846 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23642709772 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851511617991 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570885525549 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148618381278 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017413686782 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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