All over the world societies are facing a growing problem with obesity This problem affects both children and adults What are the reasons for this rise in obesity How could it be tackled

One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of individuals believing that obesity is growing at alarming rate on international level. It is affecting children and adults. There is wide range of factors that accounts for why this is happening. In my opinion, this situation can be remedied by provided some effective measures are taken.

To commence with, there are deluge of reasons of this soaring concerns. The most preponderant one is that eating habits of children and adults. To elaborate it in modern era social media there are some content that promote junk food when this kind of content is watched by children and adults they order frozen food blindly. Once they try this food they never forget the test of this type of food. Simultaneously they become addicted toward junk food. It cannot only contribute to obesity, but also leads to other catastrophic impacts for example they become lethargic and negative effect on their immunity. Besides little activity. To explain it, these days adults and children prefer to live in their comfort zone and not doing any aerobic activity that makes them healthy. They just glued with there silver screens. For instance the study results published by the World Health Organisation in March 2014 and April 2016 clearly indicates that eating patterns and less engagement in outdoor activity is the biggest reason of obesity. Needless to say all these demerits have far reaching impacts on society.

Steps to deal with this problem are many the most effective one's are not remote and complicated but practicable and accessible. The primary one's lies in the fact that educational system must include a health related subject from there primary classes, so they can learns about the negative effects of junk food and help them to not become overweight. Apart form this government must organise athletic events in society and give them best prizes. So they can easily take participate in these type of competition and get rid off from their comfort zone. only when convergent efforts are taken by all sectors, this problem can be overcome.

To conclude dealing with the obesity on international level in children and adults is one of the most prevalent issues that face almost all counties, by collective efforts of individuals and government this problem can be overcome.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'deluges'?
Suggestion: deluges
...e taken. To commence with, there are deluge of reasons of this soaring concerns. Th...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... adults they order frozen food blindly. Once they try this food they never forget th...
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Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'lie'.
Suggestion: lie
...icable and accessible. The primary ones lies in the fact that educational system mus...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'learn'
Suggestion: learn
...from there primary classes, so they can learns about the negative effects of junk food...
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Line 5, column 352, Rule ID: APART_FORM[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: Apart from
...and help them to not become overweight. Apart form this government must organise athletic ...
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Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...nd get rid off from their comfort zone. only when convergent efforts are taken by al...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, so, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07179487179 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56971693031 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8181812119 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1904761905 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285319822462 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801262269592 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707612133843 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193294514215 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581516651667 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'deluges'?
Suggestion: deluges
...e taken. To commence with, there are deluge of reasons of this soaring concerns. Th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... adults they order frozen food blindly. Once they try this food they never forget th...
^^^^
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'lie'.
Suggestion: lie
...icable and accessible. The primary ones lies in the fact that educational system mus...
^^^^
Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'learn'
Suggestion: learn
...from there primary classes, so they can learns about the negative effects of junk food...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 352, Rule ID: APART_FORM[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: Apart from
...and help them to not become overweight. Apart form this government must organise athletic ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...nd get rid off from their comfort zone. only when convergent efforts are taken by al...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, so, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07179487179 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56971693031 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8181812119 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1904761905 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285319822462 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801262269592 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707612133843 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193294514215 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581516651667 0.056905535591 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.