Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.What are your opinions on this?
In recent decades ,overgoing popularity of video games have surged globally and with improvement in animation , gaming has become more realistic. Thus, violence inside a game is well enjoyed by young children due to release of adrenaline ,that stimulates excitement and euphoria at the same time and is very addictive; however, some belive that crime rate is dramatically rising in metropolitan cities of the world ,due to that young mind's are spending more time playing these games. In my opinion,this notion requires further scrutinisation before coming to a conclusion.
Lets begin by stating that, nowadays, gaming has become more real than ever, due to
high quality graphics, better sound effects and gameplay. Violent games such as War of the world, Black ops ,due to their realistic visuals and are often played by young minds and in doing so they relate to the main character and thus began to feel sudden rage and anger and electrified sensation while killing someone in a game or spilling blood.For instance ,a recent study, was done which has shown that children engaging themselves to this type of gaming content are more ill-tempered ,impatient and have an irrational behaviour
Furthermore, parents are also somewhat responsible, violent games comes with a very specific warning about which age groups are allowed to play ,and it is clearly mention on the cover of the gaming packet.However, parents fail to notice this warning and sometimes have no idea what games their son or daughter are indulging into. Kids play for hours without being checked by their parents and thus get influenced by it
To conclude, in my opinion, Violent games play a very important role in jeopardising and deviating a child, mind towards crime and in doing so parents also play a definite role.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12925170068 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71968364248 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 20.2975951904 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 243.141019895 49.4020404114 492% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 251.333333333 106.682146367 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.0 20.7667163134 236% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.1666666667 7.06120827912 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190686394912 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786462525988 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691039749368 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968531557714 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503797873327 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.2 13.0946893788 208% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 11.3001002004 198% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.6 10.1190380762 213% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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