The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Given are the two maps depicting the predicted change of the school site within 20 years, commencing from 2004.
Perceptibly, the region is likely to experience drastic modifications with the replacement or the addition of a building to educate around 1,000 students.
In 2004, there was a main entrance and a car pak nearby on the north-west side which led to the sport field by a path. Moreover, opposite the main entrance, there was the school building 1 and building 2 separated by this path with a seating capacity of 600 people. School site was surrounded by an abundance of greenery stretching from the south to the north-east of the area.
According to the plan for changes in 2024, the position of the sports field will be moved to the south-west area and will make place for the third building to expand the teaching region. In addition, the path is predicted to be shortened due to the connection of 2 original buildings. Strikingly, a new parking lot will be built behind the building 3; moreover, it will be linked with the main entrance by a newly-erected road. The school site can accommodate up to 1.000 students after upgrading.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, third, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 2.0 24.0651302605 8% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 951.0 1615.20841683 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 198.0 315.596192385 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80303030303 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.20363070211 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82375629839 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585858585859 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 506.74238477 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7813557369 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237902408923 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972686279398 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941174693295 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139604655109 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936885120412 0.056905535591 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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