Do you agree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in life.
There are many opinions whether a student's future career achievement may be due to classmates influence or regular support provided by his parents. From my perspective, it varies among the case due to following factors.
On one side, classmate have a large effect on child's success in the future. Firstly, Child can have a positive influence by his classmate. Child spent most of the day time in class, it allows child interact with friends; Therefore, he knows how to improve his social skills and also build up his team work in class. Furthermore, child can learn competitiveness way through his classmate. This would be because child always want to get high score in class. However, in some circumstance classmate can bring some negative impact on child during school time. Child might fall into trap of smoking, drinking when child play with spoiled friend.
On the other side, parents influence a great extent to a child's career. Parents educate child for a long time. Child lives with his parents from a baby to adult, and therefore, child will be influence by his parents education. In addition, parents intend to guide future job for child. For example, Vietnam experienced a numerous families chose university for their child to study instead child themselves. A police father or mother will choose a police university for child because government policy will help their children enter police university easier than others. As a result, child do not worry about their career in future.
In conclusion, the extent to which a child success life can get partly from his parents and partly from his classmates.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: There are many opinions whether a student's future career achievement may be due to classmates influence or regular support provided by his parents.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to classmates and influence
Child spent most of the day time in class, it allows child interact with friends
Children spent most of the day time in class, so it allows children interact with friends
because child always want to get high score in class.
because a child always wants to get high score in class.
because children always want to get high score in class.
child do not worry about their career in future.
children do not worry about their careers in future.
Sentence: Child lives with his parents from a baby to adult, and therefore, child will be influence by his parents education.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to parents and education
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Words: 268 350
No. of Different Words: 157 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 268 350
No. of Characters: 1315 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.046 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.907 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 622, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
..., child do not worry about their career in future. In conclusion, the extent to which a ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.312292358804 0.247107183377 126% => OK
Verbs: 0.116279069767 0.155533422707 75% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764119601329 0.0946595960268 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0332225913621 0.0501214627716 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0564784053156 0.0437548338989 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129568106312 0.122226691241 106% => OK
Participles: 0.00664451827243 0.0403226058552 16% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.59944505876 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299003322259 0.0326793684256 91% => OK
Particles: 0.00332225913621 0.00163938923432 203% => OK
Determiners: 0.0664451827243 0.0861772015684 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0332225913621 0.021408717616 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00996677740864 0.011925033212 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1619.0 1933.35771543 84% => OK
No of words: 268.0 316.048096192 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04104477612 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20517956788 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380597014925 0.374742101984 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.257462686567 0.28420135186 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164179104478 0.203846283523 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.100746268657 0.137316102897 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59944505876 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.037074148 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585820895522 0.56093040696 104% => OK
Word variations: 61.2095127345 60.7387585426 101% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.7647058824 20.7743622355 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5362813813 49.517814964 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2352941176 127.492653851 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7647058824 20.7743622355 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.814263465372 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 41.5109745391 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 2.17741935484 1.69124875643 129% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29311919458 0.332605444948 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0843374528999 0.102741220458 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0582835912244 0.0668466124924 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.500184264618 0.534860350844 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163481968798 0.148594505496 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104695757581 0.134430193775 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434605103784 0.0742795772207 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.216094037172 0.324371583561 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0942739071284 0.0638462369009 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178864032192 0.228012699653 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326068562731 0.058150111329 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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