How many of us, who are parent, has to deal with a tantrum of our children disapointed because we have to reject his or her demand for a new toy? Where is this desire coming from? Yes, television advertising, most frecuently. Thus, I strongly agree with the statement proposed above that states television advertising direc to young children should not be allowed. The reason is simple, advertising in young children provokes a strong desire of products that can not being satified by parents, provoking the disapointement and insatisfaction of both, children and parents.
First of all, the brain of a child is far from being mature at the age of two to five years old. Consecuently, the information received from advertising and propaganda is not processed in the correct way. Moreover, at that short age many kids assume that the exaggeration in the message, usually present in advertising, is accurate and actually real. For example, a company that wants to remark that is selling a biggest candy in the market can show the product as big as a person. An adult would understand that it is not true, but an exaggeration, but not a child.
Additionally, the inmmature mind of a child can distort his or her desire in an addiction. To illustrate this point, let's review the last campains of Pokemon products. The company is the owner of a brand that constantly is updating characters and games, to keep the consumption of the products in a high level. Furthermore, if it is difficult, even for some adult to resist the temptation of buying more Pokemon's products and games, much more would be for a little child. For this reason, I strongly suggest not to expose young children to advertising.
Finally, I think it is important for parents to understand who are behing the advertising. Usually, companies whose goal is increase their incomes. That is the real motive behind of a creative idea of an advertising, and not to take care of the children target of the massage. Thus, is not to blame who promote a brand, but who control these companies and regulate the advertising whose targets are children. In fact, I deeply belive that while this controls and regulations are not implemented, parents should not allow children to be exposed to advertising.
In conclusion, in review of all the reasons exposed above, I strongly sustain that television advertising direct toward young children should not be allowed. In fact, parent should also demand the goberment to implement stronger regulations regarding this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
How many of us, who are parent, has to deal with a tantrum of o...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ny that wants to remark that is selling a biggest candy in the market can show th...
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Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... is important for parents to understand who are behing the advertising. Usually, compan...
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Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...en. In fact, I deeply belive that while this controls and regulations are not implem...
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Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d young children should not be allowed. In fact, parent should also demand the gob...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 423.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98581560284 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91602557978 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.561755894193 91% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.384769539078 780% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4153522858 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8636363636 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13636363636 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228604270576 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062969740753 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921897393309 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135638807476 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879118544618 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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