Do you agree or that improvements in technology reduce the role of olympic games

Indubitably, technology radiates its effect in all aspects of life, be it science or games. While some demographics of society hold the view that technological advancement weakens the role of Olympic games, l firmly believe it caters the needs of individuals as well as the athletes in an amazing way.

It is fairly easy to comprehend why I consider enhanced technology as a blessing to the common man and the olympians. This is mainly because it enables people to have a live telecast through mass media such as television. To illustrate, since it is not possible for all individuals to reach the stadiums to see the games live, they can have the privilege of watching the Olympics with the advent of technological gadgets. Additionally, athletes get profound knowledge and training through online tutors in order to be proficient in their sport; consequently they boom when they perform at the ground.

Meanwhile, there are some opponents who propose that technology has detrimentally affected the role of Olympic Games. They might assert this because the ugly claws of commercialism have crept into this field also. As a result, olympics has shifted away from pure amateurism to professionalism. For instance, sometimes masses get indulged in gambling to make monetary benefits and they get it done online to reduce the chance of being trapped, which not only harms the identity of an athlete but the question arises on the nation also.

To conclude, though technology has brought colossal changes in the Olympic games, I strongly believe it acts as a boon for the audience and the players as well.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an amazing way" with adverb for "amazing"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... of individuals as well as the athletes in an amazing way. It is fairly easy to comprehend why...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ommercialism have crept into this field also. As a result, olympics has shifted away...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e but the question arises on the nation also. To conclude, though technology has...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07924528302 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90392989391 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615094339623 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6139848801 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.363636364 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1751133682 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656264915299 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562572359623 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104674531233 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173905708916 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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