Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities To what extent do you agree o

The development and expansion of supermarkets in some nations have grown up strongly in recent year. Therefore many small, local business are unable to compete with the modern supermarkets, so it is claimed that the death of local communities are coming due to the closure of local business. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the contention, and the reason will be meticulously addressed below.

The colossal of modern supermarket in some countries would drives people away from the familiar of the old fashion such as old markets, groceries stores, etc. As a matter of fact, old markets may be way dirty compare to supermarkets, yet the variety of goods in supermarket much more than the old one. In other words, the old markets begun in long time ago which was maintain by old people and tradition so it really hard to keep up with the modern world. For instance, to buy foods or groceries a woman will choose a supermarket because it faster, more convenience and cleaner. The supermarkets also can purchase by credit card which is very suitable for future when cash is going to disappeared. In my opinion, the price for products in supermarket even more fairly than the markets such as 1 kilogram of meat of meat in supermarket must be weighted on the scale while in markets the seller look at that meat and give the price.

Due to the decrease of markets and local business, the death of local communities is coming closed. Needless to say, local business sell things by tradition, it kept the old way for a long time, sell things from local "made in it's country" ,so the variety which i was said hard to compete with the present. In other words, the local communities which relied on this kind of business will die soon. Instead of familiar groceries, tomorrow you will see the biggest supermarket, the town will be changed with new look, keep up with the future.

In conclusion, it is an importance to keep up with the modern world so leave behind old things is needed

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... have grown up strongly in recent year. Therefore many small, local business are unable t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'drive'
Suggestion: drive
...ern supermarket in some countries would drives people away from the familiar of the ol...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
...arkets begun in long time ago which was maintain by old people and tradition so it reall...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: GOING_TO_VBD[1]
Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'disappear'
Suggestion: disappear
...itable for future when cash is going to disappeared. In my opinion, the price for products ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 805, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'of meat'.
Suggestion: of meat
...rly than the markets such as 1 kilogram of meat of meat in supermarket must be weighted on the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...om local 'made in its country' ,so the variety which i was said hard to ...
^^
Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...its country' ,so the variety which i was said hard to compete with the prese...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, may, really, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78034682081 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7347150083 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514450867052 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2071422667 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.142857143 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7142857143 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29937294942 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108807871518 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116078952222 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196172919506 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169461603295 0.056905535591 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.