Women's roles and contributions in society have had improved since the industrial revolution. AS a result, some experts assert that due to this change of women's role, fathers should spend more time with their children and contribute to growing them up. I completely agree with this idea because of two reasons which I will explain.
Firstly, as mentioned, numerous numbers women have worked outside the home, since the 20th century. This change extended the women's role from a housewife to a more productive part of society, which had more duties. Consequently, due to the proliferation of women's responsibilities they had less time for growing up the children. So, to solve the lack of time problem the fathers should help their wives and support them.
Secondly, It should be noted each child has different sides of personality. Whether the women are the ones who decide to keep a baby or not, I think both father and mother should try to develop these aspects. Because I believe to evolve these parts of personality needs both parents participation since each of them can grow some aspects.
To sum up, it is argued that the fatherhood in raising children should increase, which I personally agree with that idea. First of all, considering the fact that women's outdoor duties grow compare to past centuries, so men should help them in indoor activities, like bringing children up, to keep the responsibility balance at home. And the last but not the least is the cooperation necessity to evolve all the children personality aspects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03125 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7598810408 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59765625 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8170195748 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0769230769 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209055971707 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722567277927 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670482525697 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120207145111 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398212840795 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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