Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on the idea that they are also responsible bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In most cultures, fathers are usually omitted in children rearing leaving an impression that mothers have a great deal of role in bringing children up; however, fathers play a significant role in the children nurture. Thus, fathers should not be neglected even if they spend most time out of families to be a breadwinner as fatherhood is significant in terms of role model and mental well-being of offsprings.
A father's role in a family is crucial since children perceiving him as a role model. This can be interpreted differently from the perspective of a boy and girl. A boy, for instance, usually sees his father as an ideal man whom the boy attempts to emulate during his entire life. In contrast, a girl perceives her father as a role model of her future husband, in other words, girls want their future husband to look like their fathers. In this respect, fatherhood is as significant as motherhood in children nurture. Fathers, therefore, should demonstrate appropriate behaviour since they are seen as a role model.
The role of fathers is also important in terms of moulding children's psychological notion. According to American Psychological Association, fathers contribute to mental well-being of children since they fell presence of safety. Children, for example, who are half-orphans (absence of a father) are considered to be less confident rather than their counterparts who live in a "full" family due to the fact that they have been brought up without a father.
In conclusion, fathers' role is significant even if it is neglected in many cultures as they are treated as breadwinners; nonetheless, it is crucial that fatherhood is emphasised as motherhood since their contribution is also substantial in children nurture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...her than their counterparts who live in a 'full' family due to the fact...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s also substantial in children nurture.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.292168674699 0.247107183377 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.144578313253 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0632530120482 0.0946595960268 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0512048192771 0.0501214627716 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0481927710843 0.0437548338989 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.156626506024 0.122226691241 128% => OK
Participles: 0.0481927710843 0.0403226058552 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.26270702813 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0210843373494 0.0326793684256 65% => OK
Particles: 0.00301204819277 0.00163938923432 184% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.066265060241 0.0861772015684 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00903614457831 0.021408717616 42% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00903614457831 0.011925033212 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1771.0 1933.35771543 92% => OK
No of words: 283.0 316.048096192 90% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25795053004 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39222614841 0.374742101984 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.335689045936 0.28420135186 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257950530035 0.203846283523 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.173144876325 0.137316102897 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26270702813 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.037074148 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519434628975 0.56093040696 93% => OK
Word variations: 51.4281505321 60.7387585426 85% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5833333333 20.7743622355 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2999912235 49.517814964 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.583333333 127.492653851 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7743622355 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.25 0.814263465372 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 57.152237927 49.1944974215 116% => OK
Elegance: 2.03703703704 1.69124875643 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233297701896 0.332605444948 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108169375252 0.102741220458 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0565533771615 0.0668466124924 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.573248119475 0.534860350844 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189662994678 0.148594505496 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107781499543 0.134430193775 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444591854178 0.0742795772207 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.289489710211 0.324371583561 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0870170332952 0.0638462369009 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167948252307 0.228012699653 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374574892752 0.058150111329 64% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9