The first smartphone was invented in 1992. By the year 2023 there may be as many as 2.5
billions smartphones in the world. The use of smartphones is decreasing our intelligence
because we are reliant on the technology and not our own minds. To what extent do you
agree or disagree?
Nobody could deny that smartphones have revolutionized our lives, enabling us to access
information and interact socially in a way which our grandparents’ generation would have
considered unthinkable. The question of whether these devices have actually made us
smarter or diminished our thinking skills is certainly worthy of debate. On balance, I
would argue that their influence has been malign.
Technophiles point to the fact that smartphones can offer us opportunities to be cleverer.
They allow unprecedented access to a vast array of data from which we can learn, as well
as giving us the chance to engage with individuals whose wisdom and thought-provoking
ideas can stimulate us. Furthermore, users can take advantage of brain-training apps and
programs which let them discover even the most obscure information by merely tapping a
screen.
However, I would contend that it is precisely this ease of access which should concern us.
We no longer need to be able to do mental arithmetic, recall the name of the discoverer
of penicillin or even remember our cousin’s birthday. Our brains are effectively becoming
redundant and humans are rapidly losing basic cognitive functions and memory skills. This
becomes obvious whenever you spot a person who has forgotten their electronic gadget
and is incapable of calculating the shopping bill or planning and carrying out routine and
basic tasks. We should all be alarmed that, as a species, we struggle to store, retain and
retrieve valuable information without the aid of a piece of technology.
It would be ridiculous to argue that the influence of smartphones has been entirely
negative. Yet, to some extent, it is fair to describe them as insidious. I accept that
smartphone technology is here to stay, but would urge manufacturers to re-design their
products so that they complement intelligent thought rather than replacing it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, so, well, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50830564784 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1569434209 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641196013289 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.979014665 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.428571429 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167118083532 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551034558251 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048708837099 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.043236623742 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530158420044 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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