government investment in the arts such as music and theatre is a waste of money. government must invest this money in public services instead. to what extend do you agree with this statement?

It is a fact that, there is a characteristic rise in the field of arts. More or less I disagree to the point that government must invest this money for public services. Main aim of this essay is to discuss both views and find disadvantages outeeigh advantages.

On the one hand, increased number of music and movie watchers give rise of dramatic changes in the subject of enjoyment. Human beings are considered as busy walker in this current world because of their increase tension and work loads. Major goal is to reduce stresses and mental disturbances which caused by job environment. They find it optional to spend time by songs or theatre plays. Nowadays teenagers are interested in movies and stage shows than any other activities. For example; around 76 percentage of teenagers are spending their leisure time by watching movies.

Moreover, it has a major effect in reducing stress in their study life. Most of them find it as an amusing activity. Musics and cinemas plays a substantial role in the ways of life. It can lead to behavioural changes. Capture of good points make changes in life and action eventhough it lies over austerity,personality and attitude.

Admittedly, governmental investment in public sector are important when we view to the fact. This may automatically affect the improvements in the field of health and education. Scholarships and provisions for health are the two disions which may get more constitutes. To site an example; in India, government spend more investment in the field of education rather than other activities.

However, services without a basic rational will not cause any effects until it has a specific baseline aim. Each field requires it's own growth. Moreover, Government makes large amount of profits by film industry. If there is no investment this field may not make any profit. Finally this field become crumbled.

In my view, I strongly support that no investment should be used for public services that kept for arts and mocks. Final result fall over the country . It is very easy to make a change in the field, but the final result will not be the same what we expected.

Votes
Average: 6.8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in my view', 'more or less']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.298994974874 0.247107183377 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.120603015075 0.155533422707 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0778894472362 0.0946595960268 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.035175879397 0.0501214627716 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0477386934673 0.0437548338989 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128140703518 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0150753768844 0.0403226058552 37% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.8431081388 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0201005025126 0.0326793684256 62% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0904522613065 0.0861772015684 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0201005025126 0.021408717616 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0150753768844 0.011925033212 126% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2143.0 1933.35771543 111% => OK
No of words: 360.0 316.048096192 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95277777778 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333333333333 0.374742101984 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241666666667 0.28420135186 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.180555555556 0.203846283523 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119444444444 0.137316102897 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8431081388 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.037074148 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597222222222 0.56093040696 106% => OK
Word variations: 70.1152752843 60.7387585426 115% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0891783567 162% => OK
Sentence length: 13.8461538462 20.7743622355 67% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.460918976 49.517814964 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.4230769231 127.492653851 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8461538462 20.7743622355 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.384615384615 0.814263465372 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 38.0128205128 49.1944974215 77% => OK
Elegance: 2.17283950617 1.69124875643 128% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38865716339 0.332605444948 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0700495610392 0.102741220458 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0766020098448 0.0668466124924 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.464086490807 0.534860350844 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111122705318 0.148594505496 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107605204888 0.134430193775 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717691244961 0.0742795772207 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.193030463457 0.324371583561 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0782007426713 0.0638462369009 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214586528343 0.228012699653 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817553027105 0.058150111329 141% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.41683366733 263% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 1.9629258517 306% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Main aim of this essay is to discuss both views and find disadvantages outeeigh advantages.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

because of their increase tension and work loads
because of their increased tension and work loads

Musics and cinemas plays a substantial role
Musics and cinemas play a substantial role

requires it's own growth.
requires its own growth.

Sentence: It is very easy to make a change in the field, but the final result will not be the same what we expected.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, post-determiner is not usually followed by a WH-determiner
Suggestion: Refer to same and what

Sentence: Main aim of this essay is to discuss both views and find disadvantages outeeigh advantages.
Error: outeeigh Suggestion: outweigh

Sentence: Capture of good points make changes in life and action eventhough it lies over austerity,personality and attitude.
Error: eventhough Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Scholarships and provisions for health are the two disions which may get more constitutes.
Error: disions Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

Avg. Sentence Length: 13.846 21.0 //More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1730 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.806 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.64 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.809 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.423 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.239 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5