The government should spend money to encourage sports and arts in school children, rather than on professional sports and art performance for the general public.
To what extend do you agree or disagree.
It is thought by some that instead of spending money on professional sports and art performance for the general public, the government ought to provide monetary help to schools as it motivates school children to be enrolled in sports and arts. In my opinion, I believe that the government should contribute its money to encourage schools children as conduction of sport events and art performances can be covered by money of private companies.
Firstly, it must be admitted that the governments spend huge amount of money in order to held professional sport events and art performances. The governments spend money on building different sport and art facilities namely stadiums, football fields, concert halls and museums. Furthermore, big events require attraction of many workers because sport and art facilities should be ready to accept big number of people. Private companies can pay all these expenses as they earn money by advertising their products and services. For example, more than half public events in Uzbekistan are sponsored by private companies. In additional, companies who contribute their monetary help to public events pay reduced taxes and advertise their products free.
On the other hand, schools cannot afford to spend huge amount of money on motivation of school children to be enrolled in sports and arts. The reason to this is that schools do not have much money and all money are spent on learning facilities such as books and salaries for teachers. Another point to consider is that when children enrolled to sports and arts from school times, they can become successful in sports or in arts and achieve high results in their future. Take for example The USA, children are encouraged to be enrolled to sports and arts from childhood as a result the number of successful athletes is higher than in other countries.
In conclusion, while private companies can contribute their money to held sport and art events as it is beneficial for them in future, the governments should spend their money to encourage children to be enrolled in sports.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...onal sports and art performance for the general public, the government ought to provide moneta...
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Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'school'.
Suggestion: school
...nment ought to provide monetary help to schools as it motivates school children to be e...
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Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...art events as it is beneficial for them in future, the governments should spend their mon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11799410029 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73132130657 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454277286136 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.9014282324 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.461538462 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454188112763 0.244688304435 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188004471188 0.084324248473 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108658290208 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327983865288 0.151304729494 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892113249354 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.