Government spend millions of dollars each year on their space programmes. Most recently, Mars is the focus of scientists’ attention. Some people think this money would be better spent on dealing with problems closer to home.
Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, when the science and economy had been grown continually, many governments in developed countries are more concerned about how to achieve the space. They spent a massive part of their budget to invest in space science, especially Mars research. But, in fact, it will be more valuable and meaningful when this money is given for somebody who really needs in the earth in general and their miserable citizens in particular instead of something a billion kilometres far from here.
There are two reasons which explain why I don’t agree with the excessive spending on space exploration. First, the national body should focus on the citizens’ life when the people are facing many problems related to the lack of income. Second, the natural disasters become more complicated in recent years, it takes a lot of money to solve their damages and support the ruined lives of people.
All countries in the world, no matter the number of their GDP or their levels in the economic world ranking, have the big problem which had existed year by year, there are poverty, homeless, unemployment, illiterate,… These issues affect directly to the general society and cause the crime problems. Obviously, the government need to solve these cases with their money first before care about the other planet. After all, the budget of the government comes from citizens’ taxes, so it’s reasonable that this money is used for people’s benefits.
Moreover, the polluted environment is a prominent reason for natural disasters. Each year, the world, especially the countries has adjoining land was sea, suffer a million storm, volcano, earthquakes,… It leads to the loss of money and people and the government is still confused about the effective solution. At least, their budget can be spent more on replicating the construction, recovery the society. It will be worse when the other planet like Mars has innovation as well as the investment when the life in the earth still is threatened by a wide range of different factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, still, well, after all, at least, in fact, in general, in particular, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17469879518 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79638787809 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599397590361 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6751746291 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245196205829 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816283974293 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412499555564 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144694109389 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212262436423 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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